First description

The camera of my cell phone is comprised of three circles, with a circle for a flashlight in the right side. The black space between the circles are smudged with vague fingerprints that glisten when you tilt the cell phone under the light. Inside the circle to the left, you could see the lens underneath the transparent layer of plastic. The circle in the middle has layers of circles underneath, and the lens, slightly smaller than the other two lenses, is shrouded within the layers. The circle to the right looks similar to the circle to the left, except that the lens and the surrounding circle is slightly larger.

Revision

The camera of my cell phone is comprised of three circles, with a circle for a flashlight in the right side. The black space between the circles are smudged with transparent, grey fingerprints that glisten when you tilt the cell phone under the light. Each circle resembles a human eye, with the lens as the iris and the outer circle as the white of an eye. Among the three eyes, the eye in the middle has the smallest iris. The circle in the middle has layers of circles underneath, and the lens, slightly smaller than the other two lenses, is shrouded within the layers. The circle to the right looks similar to the circle to the left, except that the lens and the surrounding circle is slightly larger. Each lens glints with the light reflected from the fluorescent lamp.

Re-revision

It is placed inside a rounded hole which is sunken in, exposing the black surface unprotected by the pink, plastic cover. The dark color makes the dust and fingerprints resting on the surface more visible. Looking closely, it is comprised of three circles, and there is a bright yellow circle for a flashlight in the right side. The black space between the circles are smudged with transparent, grey fingerprints that glisten when you tilt it under the light. Each circle resembles a human eye, with the lens as the iris and the outer circle as the white of an eye. Among the three eyes, the eye in the middle has the smallest iris. The circle in the middle has layers of circles underneath, and the lens, slightly smaller than the other two lenses, is shrouded within the layers. The circle to the right looks similar to the circle to the left, except that the lens and the surrounding circle is slightly larger. When placed under a fluorescent lamp, each lens glints with the light reflected from it. Under natural light, however, it remains dim.

Process notes

Although the object is related to the issue I want to tackle (the use of digital media to sexually harass women) I instantly regretted my decision to describe the camera of my cell phone. Looking at the camera, I felt as if I did not have any words to describe the camera but “circles.” Since I am not acquainted with technical terms of a smartphone or a camera, or the kinds of materials that constitute them(I’m still not sure what my cell phone cover is made of) it was hard to find exact words to describe the camera. However, revising for the third time, I think I at least succeeded in making progress.